I was planning on doing a post sometime about rewriting a paragraph or two in my book, but I haven't found one that needed to be rewritten. Instead I have decided to share a very well written paragraph in "Project Popularity".
"I put a hand on her shoulder to cut her off, suppressing smile when I saw her face turn as red as a tomato. Strange how she wasn't afraid to give me a piece of her mind seconds ago yet when it came down to something as simply as a rub on her shoulder, she'd grow utterly self-conscious. Jamie Vanderviere was so full of contradictions."
In class we have been studying good writing craft, I think this paragraph would be a good example because of the words contradiction and utterly. This is a use of diction because utterly and contradiction are not usually words I use in my everyday vocabulary. In purple is a good use of a simile and figurative language, the author could have used another word other than tomato because it's a common everyday example and it is over used. For syntax, the second sentence is really long and I feel maybe the author could have have added more detail to the paragraph and made the sentences shorter.
Thursday, January 30, 2014
Fault In Our Stars!
Incase you didn't hear they are making a movie for Fault In Our Stars! The Trailer came out yesterday, click the video below to see it!
Saturday, January 11, 2014
Update!
I am still reading Project Popularity and I think I will just finish it then start The Fault in Our Stars back up after. But I am now about half way done with Project Popularity and it is SO good.
Jamie and Adam started dating, and Luke said he didn't mind and wasn't jealous but he seem mood is very shy when he is around them. At the football game Jamie went to go congratulate Luke, and a guy from the school website wanted to take a picture of Luke and he told Jamie to get in the picture also. I feel like it was a little bit of foreshadowing and when the picture gets posted on the website people will think Luke and Jamie are dating or the will think Jamie is cheating on Adam with Luke, but in the end it will just be a mess.
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